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Jamie’s Journey: CV makeover

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“I’m gonna nuke the CV, it’s gone!” – Jamie Mudle

It’s fair to say that Jamie’s CV has been holding him back. Described by The Apprentice star Claude Littner as a CV that “is never going to get you a job“, it was clear that something drastic had to be done.

CV Knowhow, totaljobs’ exclusive partner for CV writing advice and reviews, were on hand to give Jamie’s CV a much-needed makeover.

Take a look at Jamie’s original CV. Read below to discover the top 5 mistakes made by Mr Mudle.


Jamie’s top 5 CV mistakes:

1. It’s written in the first person

All modern CV documents should be written exclusively in the third person. It might seem unnatural to write about yourself and not use either ‘I’ or ‘me’ but recruitment experts conclusively agree that this is the best way to do it.

2. Previous roles are described with paragraphs

Writing paragraphs does not help a recruiter extract important information from your CV. Make the layout easy on the eye. Use bullet points and keep sentences short.

3. No mention of career accomplishments

Jamie failed to highlight any career or life achievements in his original CV. A recruiter will have no idea how good he was in his previous jobs.

4. It’s too long

Jamie’s original CV was three pages in length. Keep your CV short, punchy and to the point. This means it shouldn’t run to more than two pages of A4.

5. No opening statement

A recruiter will have no clue as to what level Jamie operates at or what his USPs and key strengths are.

Read these articles to follow Jamie on his jobseeker journey:

Meet the contenders: The 5 runners-up reveal their stories.
Improve your body language: India Ford puts Jamie through his paces.
Claude Littner’s top 5 interview tips: The Apprentice star gives top interview advice.
Career coaching: Aimee Bateman helps Jamie plan for his career.
Understanding HR jobs: The totaljobs HR team give Jamie an insight into the sector.
Finding the right fit: Jamie tries the Good&Co app to find out more about himself.
Visiting a law firm: Linda Farrell gives Jamie advice about embarking on a law career.
Jamie is hired!: Learn more about Jamie’s new role at fashion label Finery.
The Prince’s Trust workshop: What did young jobseekers think of Jamie’s journey?

Now have a read of Jamie’s brand new CV. Much better, right? Take a look below to discover CV Knowhow’s top 3 changes.


Download Jamie’s CV

CV Knowhow’s top 3 changes:

1. Re-written opening statement

Jamie’s new CV now gives a clear targeted personal branding message to the recruitment market.

2. Professional layout 

The new layout makes it easier to read and it appears more professional to recruiters.

3. Added accomplishments

Achievements have been added to each of Jamie’s previous roles. Doing this gives proof of Jamie’s capabilities.

Get your CV noticed:

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Why not take advantage like Jamie? Get your CV rewritten by CV Knowhow.

Jamie’s verdict:


What do you think to your new CV?

I think the new CV is fantastic! I hadn’t ever really thought that you could fit that much information into a document and still have it come across as well as it does.

The use of space and the correct use of words is the most important change. I think before it was so spaced out that I’d wasted a lot of space. I also wasn’t using the words that an employer wants to see.

Where do you think you were going wrong in the first place?

I think the fact that I hadn’t updated it in so long was probably a factor. I’d done so much varied work and not really incorporated the key points of those roles. I think I wasted space on spacing it out and also wasted space rambling about irrelevant information.

I had quite important feedback from a few sources. The most important piece of feedback I got was that the information was there but you had to work at it to see it.

I wasn’t presenting the information as clearly as I could. The person looking at your CV isn’t going to take the time to search for information, if another candidate has it clearly identified.

How important do you think your CV is to your job search?

I used to think that a CV wasn’t as important as an interview but I’ve realised now that the CV is what gets you into the interview. Without a good CV you won’t get the interview. You could be absolutely perfect for the role but if it isn’t clearly stated in your CV, you’ll never get far enough to prove how perfect you could be.

What CV advice would you give to other jobseekers?

You need to update your CV, if you haven’t recently. Really go through it with a fine-tooth comb. Especially if you aren’t getting called back for roles, you know you are qualified for.

It could be that you just aren’t using the right keywords. Go through the job description before you send the CV and make sure that the keywords are there.

If you’ve got the necessary experience and skills, make sure that they are clear and stand out. Don’t waste space talking about experiences that aren’t relevant to the role you are applying for.

Jamie’s hired! #MillionPoundJamie has landed his ideal job at the online clothing brand Finery. He’s started in a customer experience and office support role at the exciting start-up. Nice one Jamie!

Find out more about Jamie’s amazing journey and watch all the videos!

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  1. Mark Saturday, 15 Oct, 2016 at 12:51 pm

    Totally wrong ! I don’t want to give the expertise away of which has helped many people find their dream job! It’s all about getting in from of the potential new employer . The only thing I would say is think technology and the question you need to ask , how many people can write about themselves ?

  2. Ebenezer Twum Saturday, 15 Oct, 2016 at 2:08 pm

    Such a brilliant and helpful article Martin. Definitely will be using all these tips. Thanks!

  3. Matt Sunday, 16 Oct, 2016 at 2:11 am

    Stupid recruters won’t even read your CV. They will pick several words, and voila you are the perfect match for this amazing job of being a code monkey… Sad, sad story, this happens quite often. Recruters are the new cancer.

    • Steve Monday, 17 Oct, 2016 at 11:45 pm

      More to the point, the recruiter will FAIL to find the couple of words that they think defines the job and identifies the perfect candidate and you won’t even get a phone call. Lazy, careless, ignorant recruiters make the time and effort presenting your skills a waste. Just make a list of the words and you stand equally as much chance.

      • Phil Cunliffe Tuesday, 1 Nov, 2016 at 5:18 pm

        Steve, if the recruiter fails to see the couple of key words that make the difference between you getting a call or not then obviously you have not laid out your CV properly. The most important information should be very clear and early on.
        The problem with the recruitment industry is that there are not enough true specialists who know what to look for.

  4. Claire C Sunday, 16 Oct, 2016 at 8:40 am

    With the gravitas and business acumen of Claude Littner’s comments that this CV will never get you a job and resulting re-vamped CV I have downloaded it and will be starting my CV again from scratch. This layout is outstanding.

  5. Harpal Sunday, 27 Nov, 2016 at 3:17 pm

    This new cv is amazing and uses the correct words,. I definitely will be updating it like this one

  6. THUYLE Tuesday, 6 Dec, 2016 at 9:42 pm


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